The previous fight scene and this scene is where I really felt that this story hit its stride. This is where it felt right to me. That’s a bad thing to say as a writer who’s more than halfway through their story, and I certainly enjoyed the rest of the story up to this point, but this sequence is where it went from being an adventure to being a personal tale. It’s about two sisters trying to do what’s right when no one else would. And the next few pages have some good sisterly moments, I think.
It was a great sequence to write, and you’ll have to let me know if it’s as enjoyable to read once the sequence is completed.